How to do this drill
- Circle every pronoun and summary noun phrase.
- Underline transitions and name their relationship.
- Rewrite any vague or inaccurate link.
Material
The town could add one permanent water station at the field. This would collect useful evidence. It also needs cleaning checks. However, they could publish them beside it, so this would improve trust. Therefore, it is a pilot, and people would know the schedule.
Your tasks
- Identify every unclear reference or relationship.
- Rewrite the paragraph with precise nouns and logical transitions.
Check your work
Finish the tasks first, then open the answer to compare.
Show the answer
Answer
‘This,’ ‘it,’ ‘they,’ and ‘them’ shift among station, evidence, town, and checks; ‘therefore’ does not express the actual result.
How to reach it
- Assign each reference a noun.
- Name cause and result relationships.
- Remove connectors that do not match logic.
Evidence
Model: ‘A permanent station at the field could provide local use evidence. Because maintenance is a reasonable concern, the town should post cleaning checks beside the unit. That visible schedule would help residents understand how the pilot is managed.’
Review your attempt
- Can every pronoun be resolved immediately?
- Does each transition express the real relationship?
Take it further
Audit one paragraph from your own writing using the same reference map.
